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Aww mom just 5 more minutes.” Tristan heard his brother say groggily a few feet away from where he had just been woken up a few seconds ago. Why does he have to make the same mistake almost every single day? The 11 year old thought as his mother hastily pulled the sheets off their beds causing a whip like effect as the cold air made contact with their bodies. “Way to go idiot!” the boy said while shivering violently. “What’d I do?” The older boy said clulessly, while digging through their dresser for something to wear. Tristan, still laying on the bed trying to wake his 6 year old brother up “Come on Frankie wake up!” The little boy still snored happily as his brother nudged him. I bet this kid could sleep through an avalanche. Finally, the youngest of the three wakes up with an unhappy look on his face. “C,mon we’re going to be late for breakfast!” Tristan said to the younger boy. Frankie quickly joined his oldest brother, Reese, and started looking for clothes to wear in his own dresser. Tristan quickly got up and walked up to the dresser he shared with his older brother. “Whats taking you so long?” he asked more curiously than angrily. Once he saw that his usually slovenly brother was still in his pajamas while laying articles of clothing neatly on his bed trying to decide which to wear. “No reason.” The boy said hastily. “Ohh trying to look good for Jullllie” the boy said mischiviously while grabbing a grey long sleeved button shirt with black horizontal and vertical lines carelessly putting it over his black T-shirt. It was quite a bit to big for him but almost all of his clothes were. They were hand me downs from their older cousins. They were picked out specifically so that it would look OK on kids their age even if they were a bit to big for the 11 and 12 year olds. He continued to grab a pair of jeans and tried to hastily put them on as his brother flicked him on his forehead causing him to lose balance and fall over . “I was just kidding geez.” Tristan said while getting up. “You better hurry up you’re going to be late, you know how irritable mom is in the morning.” With that he quickly ran down the stairs through the living room and into the kitchen. I havent really written anything that could be considered a story in my life so I just want to know if its good or not. We had to write about something that can happen in our daily lives.

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